tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post8064608090704861131..comments2024-03-10T05:10:30.206-04:00Comments on The Write Soil: "V" is for VerbsDawn M. Hamsherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17782257750640888264noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-57338474091417971492011-04-26T17:56:07.834-04:002011-04-26T17:56:07.834-04:00My attempt:
Lula,
Jambo (that means "How ar...My attempt:<br /><br />Lula, <br />Jambo (that means "How are you?"). My long-awaited safari began! Our guide, Mumbabo, captures and wrestles wild lions! The illustrious Hotel Timbili features a spa! I can't wait to show off my new zebra-stripped bathing suit when we go poolside this evening! This oasis in the desert beckons to me after a sticky-hot day in a jarring jeep driving through dusty wasteland. How do the natives put up with the terrain?<br />Your Sis,<br />Gabby<br />P.S. Frank bought a pith helmet!Dawn M. Hamsherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17782257750640888264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-28437385845677490082011-04-26T17:36:02.401-04:002011-04-26T17:36:02.401-04:00Audrey, Bravo! I love the "swan around lookin...Audrey, Bravo! I love the "swan around looking trés elegant". That phrase is amazing.Dawn M. Hamsherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17782257750640888264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-6832660003635720792011-04-26T10:51:50.375-04:002011-04-26T10:51:50.375-04:00Lula,
Jambo (that means "How are you?") ...Lula,<br />Jambo (that means "How are you?") I leave soon on Safari with a native guide known for catching big game. Imagine us after the safari as we swan around looking trés elegant in the Taimibli, a five star hotel hidden away in this rural area.<br />Your Sis,<br />GabbyAudreyhttp://www.writershelper.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-26823984500919179082011-04-25T21:45:19.418-04:002011-04-25T21:45:19.418-04:00This was actually harder than I thought :)This was actually harder than I thought :)Briannahttp://www.pocketfulofplaydough.pageek.com/wordpressnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-66599582623787271892011-04-25T21:45:06.579-04:002011-04-25T21:45:06.579-04:00This was actually harder than I thought :)This was actually harder than I thought :)Briannahttp://www.pocketfulofplaydough.pageek.com/wordpressnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-58267998283763981372011-04-25T21:43:12.666-04:002011-04-25T21:43:12.666-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Briannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581532070734685757noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-73282419616999899992011-04-25T21:18:40.352-04:002011-04-25T21:18:40.352-04:00Wow, great info! Very helpful! I'll have to tr...Wow, great info! Very helpful! I'll have to try this out while editing my book. :)<br /><br />~Melissa<br /><a href="http://melissakline.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Reflections on Writing</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15729705557661233196noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-56070537842570562212011-04-25T20:21:06.823-04:002011-04-25T20:21:06.823-04:00Li, I agree. I haven't had a chance to do this...Li, I agree. I haven't had a chance to do this exercise yet, but I am looking forward to comparing the original to the new to see how much of a difference it will make. I bet it will be big. I also hope others post their versions so I can see what verbs they decided on.Dawn M. Hamsherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17782257750640888264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7138668239690270526.post-78227824516183474092011-04-25T20:00:20.262-04:002011-04-25T20:00:20.262-04:00Great exercise to keep in mind when editing. Somet...Great exercise to keep in mind when editing. Sometimes using a different verb can change the whole feel of a scene.Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.com