This book has potential, but it has some first-time author mistakes.
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Once the storyline gets going, it is fun and well-paced, but it is missing the time element of travel. It moves from one big scene to the next, never letting the reader feel like they are really roughing it or experiencing Traboltia (and getting attached to it, which is necessary, but never happens).
And the time element…Does the author think we are stupid and don’t realize her timeline discrepancies? I get that the parallel universes run on different time (2 weeks vs. 2 years), but her events in Traboltia don’t add up! Are we talking hundreds of years or 50 years? While I liked the plot and the characters, this almost ruined it for me.
Arrangement and placement of some chapters seem out of order like they were slapped together. I had forgotten some of the characters by the time they came around again. And, what about Ben? If he is supposed to be the future king, he needs developed more because right now, I could care less about him.
There is also the Christianity stuff. Jenesse goes to church, Mr. Hodge prays, Whitney thanks Jesus – the author should have either gone all the way with Christianity or she should have stuffed it. As is, it is luke-warm and will turn non-Christians off and leave Christians wondering if Danya gets “saved”.
And maybe worse of all was the cliff-hanger ending! Did the author do that so that I’d be forced to buy her next book? When I’m done reading, I want to be done! I will choose whether or not to buy the next book.
Maybe the author will “get a clue” by Book 2, but I won’t be buying it.
Guess who wrote this? It was me! I wrote this about my own book (the one I am revising). The point is to anticipate what readers will be disappointed in and then later fix the problems, so that you NEVER EVER get a book review like this one. ;0)