Friday, July 8, 2011


This was inspired by Writercise's 100 Word Liar Exercise.

Writing Exercise: Write a short story with/about the word "liar". My response is below (approx. 200 words)

I don't have a title for this. Can you suggest one?
by Dawn M. Hamsher

Who told him?

"Brady Coons is a big fat liar!" I screamed across the lunch room. The stoplight on the wall was a yellow from the loud lunchroom noise, but with my announcemnt, the room fell silent and the light turned green.

With all eyes on me, I stalked over to Brady.

"Take it back!" I shouted.

"No way!"

"You will take it back or else."

The lunch lady, Mrs. Grubmacher was starting to make her way over. I'd have to do this quick.

"Or else what?"

I did the only thing I could think of that would really irk him. I kissed him full on the lips. He sputtered and began a sort of flailing dance to try to get the cootie girl germs off him. His friends had backed up. None of them wanted to be near him and risk Cooties.

Then to seal the deal forever I repeated the dreaded words, "Circle Circle Knife Knife, Now you got them all your life."


I sat waiting outside Principal Jergin's office and smiled on the inside. How much trouble could I really be in? I didn't hit him after all. I just kissed him. And it was worth it. Now, no one would ever think that I "liked" Brady. My secret was safe; It was a brilliant plan.


  1. Your writing is so clever, Dawn! This is a great short story. I chuckled when I read the surprise turn around. I really wanted to cheer for the girl who put Brady in his place because it was like having a victory over such people from my own past.

  2. Aww, how cute! :D Very clever girl.

  3. Brilliant! Just the right thing to do. "Circle Circle Circle Knife Knife..." is unfamiliar to me. Tell me its origin, Please!

  4. Pam, Thanks Pam! I was thinking after I wrote this that I really like action. I don't know if that is because I love drama or what, but I like my scenes to have action. Hmmm...

    Laura, Thanks! Glad you liked it.

    Susan, It's just a kid's rhyme. I remember saying this as a child, "Circle, Circle, Dot, Dot, now I got my Cootie Shot" and I was protected. My daughter taught me this new verse, "Circle, Circle, Knife, Knife, Now you got them all your life. Sooooo, You give someone the Cooties first, then protect yourself quick with the Dot, Dot, one and then Knife the person so they keep it forever. Good eh?

  5. Cute and fun! Let's see, I think I would name it ... Cooties.

    Thanks for doing this!! :)


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